Once a mouse was in a hole in a wall, it was unusual. He lived in the middle of nowhere. no one knew he lived there but one day his life changed. Someone wanted to look after him he was so happy he was no longer lonely. His face was bright his face has not been bright in a while. They took him home and took good care of him the girl loved him. They fed him every day he loved his cage. But then someone stole his cheese he was very upset, but he bought a lot more cheese.
Hi Archie,
Well done on a beautiful piece of writing. You successfully integrated our technique of the week (beginning with a “Where Things Are” sentence), and I loved the way you made us feel the feelings of the mouse so effectively.
Keep on writing!